Mark was completely distraught. He could not believe that she was gone. He went into his house and refused to come out. After a full week his best friend, Michael, went to talk to him. He said that instead of moping around his house he should man up and go out and look for his wife. So that was what Mark did. He sold everything he had and gave away all of his money and went to search for his wife.
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| A homeless man sleeping in a parking lot by Franco Folini via Wikimedia Commons |
A year later Mark was no closer to finding his wife. He found himself in a busy town and resorted to begging on the street. One day a nice woman came and gave him a sandwich and he went to cross the main street to go sit at his favorite bench to eat his dinner.
Meanwhile, there was a bus that was going to a museum down the street. There was a passenger that was crazed and drunk. With an insane look in his eyes he went to the bus driver with a gun in hand and told him to drive and not stop unless he told him to. So the bus driver with not only his life but everyone's life in that bus in mind, did as he was told. As he was speeding down main street the driver noticed a man that did not look either way as he was crossing the street. He was too involved in eating his sandwich. The driver tried to avoid the man, but it was too late. The bus hit Mark and killed him.
Later in court, they tried to determine who exactly was responsible for the death of Mark. Was it the crazy man on the bus? Was it the bus driver? Or was it the lady who gave Mark the sandwich? After much deliberation, the jury decided that it was Mark's fault. He lacked to look both ways before crossing the street. However, they did all agree that the crazy man on the bus deserved punishment, but not for murder.
Author's Note: This story is based off of The Snake's Poison riddle from the Twenty-Two Goblins unit. I really liked this story and I liked the answer to the riddle. In the riddle a man dies because he ate food that had snake's poison in it. The question was who killed the man? The lady who gave him the food? The eagle that was killing the snake? Or the snake who, while dying, got some of it's venom into the man's food? The answer was the man himself because he was not paying attention. So I stayed pretty close to the original storyline.
Bibliography: "The Snake's Poison" from the "Twenty-Two Goblins" translated by Arthur W. Ryder (1917)
I think you did a great job in rewriting this story. I like how you changed the plot line, and honestly, I like the way you told the story better! It was much more relatable to read your story. I loved the imagery you created, and I thought your version flowed very well. Overall, I think you did a great job!
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting retelling, Chelsey! I also read Twenty-two Goblins this week, and found that riddle very interesting. I liked how you kept the riddle the same, but completely changed the plot and the characters. It was very creative, and definitely not something I would have ever thought of! It makes me wonder what would really happen if something like this was taken to court!
ReplyDeleteHey Chelsey! Great job with your retelling of this weeks story! I love stories or books that hold a riddle or hidden moral within them and then having to decided for yourself what those are! I think that you did a really great job of being creative and creating a story that flowed well and was enjoyable to read and understandable. I love that the end of the riddle places the blame on the man himself. Sometime we need to own up to our mistakes and take responsibility for our actions!
ReplyDeleteHey Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteI decided to do the extra credit for commenting so I decided to read another story of yours. I agree with you that the original story has a really neat premise and I think you did the original justice with your rendition of it. I was sad though that the poor guy spent all of his money on trying to find his wife but ended up being homeless and dying from not paying attention when crossing the street.